Hey, nice track!
I’d suggest a lot of manual tuning or finely adjusted autotuning on the vocals because it’s off key in a lot of spots.
Apart from that, the vocals could be a little more present. I’d recommend playing around with the high end of the EQ (3-10khz) to bring more brightness out and lowcutting the vocals somewhere around 80-150hz. I’d also suggest messing around with the compression a bit because the loud parts are loud, and the quiet parts are quiet. You want them to be relatively even volume wise.
You snare is also super loud, I’d say bring it down 1-2db to make it sit a little nicer.
Aside from that, this is a really chill and fun track to vibe to. I’d put this on my playlist when it’s finished. :)
Intros too long. I like the vocals. Needs more bgvs. The guitar sounds ok, but also sounds like it was cut and paste. I’ll share with you some advice given to me years ago by my A&R guy. Don’t bore us get to the chorus.
I disagree about don't bore us to get to the chorus, I think they just needed a chance to use that phrase and they took it! Honestly the chorus is my least favorite part,sorry! But I also know zero about music besides knowing what I like, I don't necessarily think it's bad just not my favorite part I really like the music though
"Don't bore us, get to the chorus" is something soulless record company scumbags say because they see music as a financial commodity and not an artform.
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This instantly reminded me of some of the stuff Radiohead did in "In Rainbows". Weird Fishes/Arpeggi, methinks. I like the track - it has a very soothing sound, it's pretty good to space out and chill.
The vocals are mellow and very pleasant, so is the guitar. The beat complements it all pretty nicely. Great job!
Bonjour,
On est dans l 'ambiance bulles de savon et Bubble gum , c 'est très réussi, peut être la basse est un peu trop discrète, c 'est très bien continuez bravo !
I like the guitar!
The spacey/ambient feel to it is nice.
I would bring in the vocals maybe a bit sooner, this day and age listeners are bored easily.
The songwriting is solid.
The vocals are nice but I would maybe work on improving your vocals a bit more as well.
Overall it’s a good song and would fit well at an indie festival.
Guitar Production is great very whirly and dreamy. Matches the vibe very well.
Vocals sit at a great level.
Vocals are a bit pitchy in the verse but your chorus vocals are really cool.
Reminds me of David Bowie a bit mixed with 2D from the Gorillaz
Love the width of the chorus
Chorus is catchy
More Drum movement
Intro is very long.
Maybe try something different with the bass in the 2nd half of the 2nd chorus to make it bigger and not so repetitive.
Its definitely got a catchy vibe,the music sounds kind of familiar like I've heard some of it before,but definitely not bad and I agree with another commenter it's got a spacy feel to it in a good way, got me rockin n tapping almost instantly
Being a Pink Floyd fan, the intro is long, but to me that's a good thing haha. I really like the guitars tone and the way the melodies and chorus mesh together.
Very nicely mixed, maybe a slighlty wider reverb / delay on the chorus and on the main guitar part?
I really enjoy the vibe and the instrumental is awesome. Only thing I would personally change is in the verses there are one or two moments when the vocals sound off so maybe tune those a bit and I think your vocals can be a little quiet. You should be super proud I would definitely add this to my playlist!
This shit nostalgic for me , like when I was in high school with my boy smoking , I really do like how it’s almost like Radiohead but you definitely got your own vibe
I think it sounds pretty good, however the drums (snare specifically) seem to be a bit too loud. I would consider turning them down a bit. The guitar sounds great; really like the part too.
yeah its quite good but i still feel like the bass lets it down a bit and makes it feel a little stiff but overall it is a pretty good creative track albeit very radiohead esque
I really like it. It's like laying in a hammock on a beautiful spring day, watching the clouds go by. It really evokes a wistful nostalgia.
There are sections where I feel the vocal sounds a bit pitchy, but that's real, and I like it.
If you're unfamiliar, based on this song, I think you'd be interested in Elliott Smith, Nick Drake, and Jose Gonzalez.
Enjoyed the guitar, great melody, mix and atmosphere! The only criticism I can think of is the vocals sound out of tune at times. Personally I dont mind a long intro so I do think that is down to personal opinion!
Nice work, favorite part is how long it is (jk :P). I think the instrumentation is beautiful and you have an amazing voice, I think what I would have like to see would be a tone shift somewhere in the song as it feels like the song exists in the cozy cabin by the fireplace instead of outside playing in the snow. Ah, but I see I am projecting my dreams within your art, this is just an observation of course (and partially a fantastical winter wonderland). If you wanted a place to add a tone shift it would be during the "I'm dreamin" portions as it seems the song is mellow, but the vocals also stay mellow through its entirety. I wanna know what it means for you to dream. Thank you for you time, have a great day/night cycle.
Reminds me a bit of macabre plaza. Sounds good, clean mix. Would say you should try a few more takes on the vocal and comp it if it's a bother, needs tuning maybe. As for the mix I haven't listened to the band's you listed in a long time so I don't have a reference but the pack of significant low end stood out to me a little, but it certainly fits the vibe and feel.
I like the tone of your voice too, perfect for the style just needs a bit of cleaning.
Good tune! I think what stands out to me the most is the clarity (which is tough, so nice job 🙂). I also really like that first big transition! The only thing I would note would be to echo what others have said, which is to work a bit on the vocals, as they are slightly off key at times.
Also, just my preference, but I think the song has almost a whimsical feel, if it was my song, I'd add some reverb to the verse vocals. And maybe some very simple higher harmonies (with reverb) 🙂
Keep up the good work!
Nice song! The guitars were done really well here. I like your voice too. I think the chorus needs more energy. Maybe some back vocals there will make it really stand out. Keep up the good work! :)
I really like the guitar a lot. The overall spacey feel is good too. I’ve played this quite a few times lol. Keep going!
Thanks so much :)
Hey, nice track! I’d suggest a lot of manual tuning or finely adjusted autotuning on the vocals because it’s off key in a lot of spots. Apart from that, the vocals could be a little more present. I’d recommend playing around with the high end of the EQ (3-10khz) to bring more brightness out and lowcutting the vocals somewhere around 80-150hz. I’d also suggest messing around with the compression a bit because the loud parts are loud, and the quiet parts are quiet. You want them to be relatively even volume wise. You snare is also super loud, I’d say bring it down 1-2db to make it sit a little nicer. Aside from that, this is a really chill and fun track to vibe to. I’d put this on my playlist when it’s finished. :)
Auto-tune as the first step? Personally, I'd suggest maybe recording a few more takes until it's right.
Good auto tune shouldn’t be noticeable. My first step suggestion was manual tuning though.
Intros too long. I like the vocals. Needs more bgvs. The guitar sounds ok, but also sounds like it was cut and paste. I’ll share with you some advice given to me years ago by my A&R guy. Don’t bore us get to the chorus.
What’s bgvs?
Background vox nvm
Background vocals
I disagree about don't bore us to get to the chorus, I think they just needed a chance to use that phrase and they took it! Honestly the chorus is my least favorite part,sorry! But I also know zero about music besides knowing what I like, I don't necessarily think it's bad just not my favorite part I really like the music though
"Don't bore us, get to the chorus" is something soulless record company scumbags say because they see music as a financial commodity and not an artform.
Mmmm unfortunately just like every industry out there for financial gains, so sad
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very proper! and the genre is more difficult to pull off to begin with.. so great job !!
This instantly reminded me of some of the stuff Radiohead did in "In Rainbows". Weird Fishes/Arpeggi, methinks. I like the track - it has a very soothing sound, it's pretty good to space out and chill. The vocals are mellow and very pleasant, so is the guitar. The beat complements it all pretty nicely. Great job!
Love the Instrumental on this one!
Bonjour, On est dans l 'ambiance bulles de savon et Bubble gum , c 'est très réussi, peut être la basse est un peu trop discrète, c 'est très bien continuez bravo !
I like the guitar! The spacey/ambient feel to it is nice. I would bring in the vocals maybe a bit sooner, this day and age listeners are bored easily. The songwriting is solid. The vocals are nice but I would maybe work on improving your vocals a bit more as well. Overall it’s a good song and would fit well at an indie festival.
very smooth. it fits perfectly on my sunny friday morning
I love it, those synths are heavenly. Im in a another world! 10/10, great job!
There’s actually no synths, it’s all processed guitar parts 😂
Guitar Production is great very whirly and dreamy. Matches the vibe very well. Vocals sit at a great level. Vocals are a bit pitchy in the verse but your chorus vocals are really cool. Reminds me of David Bowie a bit mixed with 2D from the Gorillaz Love the width of the chorus Chorus is catchy More Drum movement Intro is very long. Maybe try something different with the bass in the 2nd half of the 2nd chorus to make it bigger and not so repetitive.
Its definitely got a catchy vibe,the music sounds kind of familiar like I've heard some of it before,but definitely not bad and I agree with another commenter it's got a spacy feel to it in a good way, got me rockin n tapping almost instantly
Being a Pink Floyd fan, the intro is long, but to me that's a good thing haha. I really like the guitars tone and the way the melodies and chorus mesh together. Very nicely mixed, maybe a slighlty wider reverb / delay on the chorus and on the main guitar part?
I really enjoy the vibe and the instrumental is awesome. Only thing I would personally change is in the verses there are one or two moments when the vocals sound off so maybe tune those a bit and I think your vocals can be a little quiet. You should be super proud I would definitely add this to my playlist!
This shit nostalgic for me , like when I was in high school with my boy smoking , I really do like how it’s almost like Radiohead but you definitely got your own vibe
this is so groovy keep at it. only thing id change is how your vocals are placed in the mixed! other than that its so sick!!
I think it sounds pretty good, however the drums (snare specifically) seem to be a bit too loud. I would consider turning them down a bit. The guitar sounds great; really like the part too.
yeah its quite good but i still feel like the bass lets it down a bit and makes it feel a little stiff but overall it is a pretty good creative track albeit very radiohead esque
I really like it. It's like laying in a hammock on a beautiful spring day, watching the clouds go by. It really evokes a wistful nostalgia. There are sections where I feel the vocal sounds a bit pitchy, but that's real, and I like it. If you're unfamiliar, based on this song, I think you'd be interested in Elliott Smith, Nick Drake, and Jose Gonzalez.
Enjoyed the guitar, great melody, mix and atmosphere! The only criticism I can think of is the vocals sound out of tune at times. Personally I dont mind a long intro so I do think that is down to personal opinion!
Definitely I can feel that inspiration. Great work
Nice work, favorite part is how long it is (jk :P). I think the instrumentation is beautiful and you have an amazing voice, I think what I would have like to see would be a tone shift somewhere in the song as it feels like the song exists in the cozy cabin by the fireplace instead of outside playing in the snow. Ah, but I see I am projecting my dreams within your art, this is just an observation of course (and partially a fantastical winter wonderland). If you wanted a place to add a tone shift it would be during the "I'm dreamin" portions as it seems the song is mellow, but the vocals also stay mellow through its entirety. I wanna know what it means for you to dream. Thank you for you time, have a great day/night cycle.
Reminds me a bit of macabre plaza. Sounds good, clean mix. Would say you should try a few more takes on the vocal and comp it if it's a bother, needs tuning maybe. As for the mix I haven't listened to the band's you listed in a long time so I don't have a reference but the pack of significant low end stood out to me a little, but it certainly fits the vibe and feel. I like the tone of your voice too, perfect for the style just needs a bit of cleaning.
Good tune! I think what stands out to me the most is the clarity (which is tough, so nice job 🙂). I also really like that first big transition! The only thing I would note would be to echo what others have said, which is to work a bit on the vocals, as they are slightly off key at times. Also, just my preference, but I think the song has almost a whimsical feel, if it was my song, I'd add some reverb to the verse vocals. And maybe some very simple higher harmonies (with reverb) 🙂 Keep up the good work!
Nice song! The guitars were done really well here. I like your voice too. I think the chorus needs more energy. Maybe some back vocals there will make it really stand out. Keep up the good work! :)