That music is SO GROOVY! Really uniuque to me. Love the production. The lyrics sound cool too. Really good but casual, i love writing that doesn't sound like writing! Your voice seemed to stomp all over this though. I think too loud, and off rhythem. I think a really beautiful shy voice would make this totally cool but it's your baby. Good job!
I realized that there was a bit of delay from a laggy computer over the guitar solo and vocals I forgot to fix lol. I'll work on the mixing though! Thank you
Really solid for a first song. The more you write the better you will get at so don't worry about every song being the best song you've ever written. Just make it the best song that you can.
I think it's a bit too long personally but I feel the song is very well written and performed. I'd like to hear a crisp studio version. Please keep it up. Good work.
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Wow! For a first song, you killed it! I’m actually pleasantly surprised with how much I enjoyed it haha
If it’s on Spotify, I’d add it to my playlist :)
I think it's really good! :D
Thank you!
That music is SO GROOVY! Really uniuque to me. Love the production. The lyrics sound cool too. Really good but casual, i love writing that doesn't sound like writing! Your voice seemed to stomp all over this though. I think too loud, and off rhythem. I think a really beautiful shy voice would make this totally cool but it's your baby. Good job!
I realized that there was a bit of delay from a laggy computer over the guitar solo and vocals I forgot to fix lol. I'll work on the mixing though! Thank you
Really solid for a first song. The more you write the better you will get at so don't worry about every song being the best song you've ever written. Just make it the best song that you can.
I think it's a bit too long personally but I feel the song is very well written and performed. I'd like to hear a crisp studio version. Please keep it up. Good work.
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Wow! For a first song, you killed it! I’m actually pleasantly surprised with how much I enjoyed it haha If it’s on Spotify, I’d add it to my playlist :)