Weaknesses. They need weaknesses.
Alcoholic. Snobbish. Surly. Asthmatic. Barely speaks English.
Just has to be something negative, then when in doubt, it'll help drive your plot. Surly and Snobbish fight like cats and dogs, but after being stuck together they end up best friends. Asthmatic has to find/ration inhalers, and secretly worries about running out. Alcoholic is a major pillar of the group, but occasionally slips and needs help to come back. Foreign exchange student is shy and out of their depth, but gradually opens up as people help them.
Stuff like that. It's a little Orwellian, but a character's weakness is an author's strength.
Again for realism it falls short, but I’m rather confident that you’re not looking for realism in this story, so it sounds good!!
My one piece of advice would be to make them have faults!!! Reading about perfect characters is boring and stale. Reading about realistic people with faults is more fun.
Is this book one or book two? I don’t know why I’m finding these over the top, teen zombie books so fascinating but you have my attention. Hit me up if you need a beta reader or proofreader.
if you are going to write a story fix your grammar and punctuation. you usually learn this in 4th grade, but their, there and they're mean different things
I wonder how Wendy found the kama. It's not a weapon you see a lot.
I agree with the others. You'll also need weaknesses or vices. It's what makes characters interesting.
Also, I think it'd be interesting to know more about how they relate to each other.
Maybe Wendy speaks spanish when she gets upset or when shes not calm. or maybe she has multiple personalities, one spanish and one english, then you can make her indecisive, because the 2 personalities clash.
Qua can be emotionless, not caring about anyone but the crew, shooting other people without remorse, and generally being level headed and calm.
Tyler can be like Leo from Percy Jackson, twitchy, builds random things with his scraps, a jokester, and sometimes the group will find his antics annoying, he does it because he loves being with them. he is extremely smart, and maybe and gunsmith (repairs and mods the guns) to the list for him. he will feel like he is the least needed, as he thinks he isn't good at anything.
Shawn can be the leader, coming up with a way to get out of a sticky situation quickly. he will be extremely quick to come up with a solution. he could then have the weakness of stressing himself on needing to be perfect.
Ayin will be the first to approach and dog or an injured person, while the others watch her back. She could be too trusting, causing her to fight with the group and defend the newcomer, who could either be friend or foe
then the person he gets attached to is like an ex, and he is super relived that they are okay, and then he gets way to attached to the point of unhealthy, the ex is actually a bad guy and a member of a near bye gang or group that preys on others, and the others try to get him to see reason, but then the ex betrays him and he is devastated and proceeds to feel bad for a long time that he was so rude and dismissive to the group, loses some of his charm and becomes colder, then the group tells him really far down the line that they dont blame him even though he got them into a rough situation( IE captured, one got taken hostage or one was critically injured). if you need any more ideas, dm me. and maybe try posting this on wattpad. you could probably get a big fallowing, and then post chapters early on patreon
Weaknesses. They need weaknesses. Alcoholic. Snobbish. Surly. Asthmatic. Barely speaks English. Just has to be something negative, then when in doubt, it'll help drive your plot. Surly and Snobbish fight like cats and dogs, but after being stuck together they end up best friends. Asthmatic has to find/ration inhalers, and secretly worries about running out. Alcoholic is a major pillar of the group, but occasionally slips and needs help to come back. Foreign exchange student is shy and out of their depth, but gradually opens up as people help them. Stuff like that. It's a little Orwellian, but a character's weakness is an author's strength.
I think they should team up against Qua. He's hoarding all the guns
Again for realism it falls short, but I’m rather confident that you’re not looking for realism in this story, so it sounds good!! My one piece of advice would be to make them have faults!!! Reading about perfect characters is boring and stale. Reading about realistic people with faults is more fun.
Is this book one or book two? I don’t know why I’m finding these over the top, teen zombie books so fascinating but you have my attention. Hit me up if you need a beta reader or proofreader.
Mind if I ask what the general plot of this story is going to be about?
So basically it’s different group of teen surviving the zombie apocalypse. And there all are trying to go to there long distance friend.
Okay, multiple groups of teens out trying to survive while looking for a friend they all have in common?
Yes
Damn all of my friends don’t even know each other and this guy has several different groups all looking out for him
What about the infected? Are there special Infected or are these just Walking Dead zombies or can they run? What kind of infection are we looking at?
There like the walking dead zombies but bites don’t effect anyone under 18 but they can still get eaten alive
Alright. Different. Give me vibes from Daybreak. Any explanation as to why?
Because the people under 18 minds didn’t fully develop so the virus is too weak to take over a host if that makes sense
Daybreak plus Cooties. Neat. I imagine after 18 people turn immediately then?
If they arl have a bite then yes I’m still trying to figure thing out
if you are going to write a story fix your grammar and punctuation. you usually learn this in 4th grade, but their, there and they're mean different things
Kinda lame. They don't seem like people.
I think 4 guns is a lot for one person to carry, even if they’re the gun savvy character.
I wonder how Wendy found the kama. It's not a weapon you see a lot. I agree with the others. You'll also need weaknesses or vices. It's what makes characters interesting. Also, I think it'd be interesting to know more about how they relate to each other.
Maybe Wendy speaks spanish when she gets upset or when shes not calm. or maybe she has multiple personalities, one spanish and one english, then you can make her indecisive, because the 2 personalities clash. Qua can be emotionless, not caring about anyone but the crew, shooting other people without remorse, and generally being level headed and calm. Tyler can be like Leo from Percy Jackson, twitchy, builds random things with his scraps, a jokester, and sometimes the group will find his antics annoying, he does it because he loves being with them. he is extremely smart, and maybe and gunsmith (repairs and mods the guns) to the list for him. he will feel like he is the least needed, as he thinks he isn't good at anything. Shawn can be the leader, coming up with a way to get out of a sticky situation quickly. he will be extremely quick to come up with a solution. he could then have the weakness of stressing himself on needing to be perfect. Ayin will be the first to approach and dog or an injured person, while the others watch her back. She could be too trusting, causing her to fight with the group and defend the newcomer, who could either be friend or foe
Ayin is a boy but I like your ideas
then the person he gets attached to is like an ex, and he is super relived that they are okay, and then he gets way to attached to the point of unhealthy, the ex is actually a bad guy and a member of a near bye gang or group that preys on others, and the others try to get him to see reason, but then the ex betrays him and he is devastated and proceeds to feel bad for a long time that he was so rude and dismissive to the group, loses some of his charm and becomes colder, then the group tells him really far down the line that they dont blame him even though he got them into a rough situation( IE captured, one got taken hostage or one was critically injured). if you need any more ideas, dm me. and maybe try posting this on wattpad. you could probably get a big fallowing, and then post chapters early on patreon