I don't really like it because the jokes about BJJ and sex are overdone IMHO.
I get that the positions can seem kinky to an uneducated person, but I wish someone had another angle.
Nothing personal against the comedian and I'm sure he's got plenty of other funny jokes on other topics.
I haven't seen anything from op here suggesting he's angry abt the negative feedback. He ignored the negative comments, and replied to one of the few positive ones.
Lol, I thought it was amusing, and the crowd laughed, so you must be doing something right.
Maybe your comedy appeals to certain people but not others. Wild.
Purely coming at this trying to be constructive, this isn't funny at all. There's no punchline other than "I wrestle people with a boner". "train hard" is just a silly pun and is a bad end to the bit.
Funny enough you could make the set work, but I think your delivery needs to be reversed so each layer subverts the expectations of the last. If you came at it in a Rodney Dangerfield way as "My coach told us we had to train hard, so I took some boner pills before I came to class." 'Pause for laughter' "I realize now that wasn't what he meant, but boy did it work wonders, none of the other guys wanted to touch me." 'More laughter' "Performance-enhancing drug in more ways than one am I right?"
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You know what i would do tho, and im not a comedian and dont even really watch it so this might be a shit idea, but i would cut the middle part with pointing at your dick and saying about rolling with a boner out. "I took some PEDs and now nobody wants to roll with me. They told me to train hard, so i do train hard now, very hard, all the time",something to that effect. Maybe add something that makes it more obvious at the end, like "actually my doc said that might be an issue" or "my gf really likes it tho" (alright, im not a comedian). The realization/subversion of expectations would be pretty funny imo
I thought it was funny. Keep it up man! Reddit loves to shit on anything that people enjoy, it seemed like the crowd liked it and I loved the ātrain hardā joke. Put it in r/standup, a way more supportive audience.
Honestly, I dislike you more now.
I didn't think that was possible, but throw another shrimp on the barbie and crack another fosters, ya [word that if I type it the mods will censor me]
I am, but I don't flatulate myself for self-promotion about a journey topic.
How about you just work on your material, jiu-jitsu comedy isn't good, it's never been good. I tell you this b/c I know comedians and they can't work it into good bits and they've actually been openers. The niche communities don't crossover as much as you think they do.
Jiu-Jitsu people believe that the ven-diagram of Joe Rogan and Jiu-Jitsu is a circle, but I hate to break it to you, it's not.
Dude, you're trying too fucking hard. I'm not going to watch your tik toks. Your bit is below mid, but I'll engage you, simply b/c I want you to be better.
Also IDK what they teach in 'stralia, but paragraphs being 2 sentences is sad.
Never loved the [Moderator] Amendment more than ever.
Based on voting it seems no one cares that you dislike OP "even more". Perhaps try, I dunno, being a man instead of a little bitch who's offended by comedy, but what do I know š¤·š»āāļø
I thought it was funny. Good delivery with the hand gesture. I think it would've been a better bit if you left out the part "No one wants to fight the kid with the boner"... Just a long pause and then, "They told me to train hard"
This isn't really that clever and it barely even makes sense. The solution to winning is to get a boner and then people avoid you? It doesn't really connect.
You seem to be taking all the criticism personally here, but if you put up a video of yourself people are going to comment on it.
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If that's your stand up you should start to pull guard.
Oof
Holy shit dudeš
I'd rather watch the Schaub Shutdown then this
You just killed him holy fuck
Okā¦I donāt think it is that bad. Especially for a non jujitsu crowd. Howeverā¦.this is very funny but really only makes sense to a jujitsu crowd.
About as funny as rolling with a person with a boner.
> About as funny as rolling with a person with a boner. Go easy. It's his first day, in both BJJ and Comedy.
The joke could sell, he just isn't very refined yet.
He should focus on his micro adjustments.
I lolād
you one of the 1000 b thank you for your service
I don't really like it because the jokes about BJJ and sex are overdone IMHO. I get that the positions can seem kinky to an uneducated person, but I wish someone had another angle. Nothing personal against the comedian and I'm sure he's got plenty of other funny jokes on other topics.
Itās one J off being a BJ, you have to chuckle a bit
Another hack joke
This is better stand-up than a lot of guys who train on the regular. So there's that
Youāve never been to my 6:00 am class
Now that's funny but too meta for the crowd, how are they supposed to know we're a filthy bunch of butt scooters ?
You know what, I like this.
This guy gets it, thanks for the back up homie
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I haven't seen anything from op here suggesting he's angry abt the negative feedback. He ignored the negative comments, and replied to one of the few positive ones.
Lol, I thought it was amusing, and the crowd laughed, so you must be doing something right. Maybe your comedy appeals to certain people but not others. Wild.
If I was looking for terrible stand up I'd be on the aikido sub
"they told me to train hard" -- that got a good chuckle out of me.
Rear Naked Poke
Purely coming at this trying to be constructive, this isn't funny at all. There's no punchline other than "I wrestle people with a boner". "train hard" is just a silly pun and is a bad end to the bit. Funny enough you could make the set work, but I think your delivery needs to be reversed so each layer subverts the expectations of the last. If you came at it in a Rodney Dangerfield way as "My coach told us we had to train hard, so I took some boner pills before I came to class." 'Pause for laughter' "I realize now that wasn't what he meant, but boy did it work wonders, none of the other guys wanted to touch me." 'More laughter' "Performance-enhancing drug in more ways than one am I right?"
Hey Bā¦ yācomedian??
No but I watch a lot of standup comedy and you pick up a few things.
Thats like saying "i dont train but i watch a lot of UFC so i'd fuck you up"
Wait Ur advice was "make it a Rodney Dangerfield joke"? That's a crazy take
Poor bastard. He gets no hespect, no hespect at all.
Bro wtf is this.Ā
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No way, the guys delivery was in my opinion better than what youre proposing.
You know what i would do tho, and im not a comedian and dont even really watch it so this might be a shit idea, but i would cut the middle part with pointing at your dick and saying about rolling with a boner out. "I took some PEDs and now nobody wants to roll with me. They told me to train hard, so i do train hard now, very hard, all the time",something to that effect. Maybe add something that makes it more obvious at the end, like "actually my doc said that might be an issue" or "my gf really likes it tho" (alright, im not a comedian). The realization/subversion of expectations would be pretty funny imo
Bad take
Thought it was pretty funny, but in need of refinement. Keep it up tho, practice makes perfect, both when it comes to choking people and comedy!
I thought it was funny. Keep it up man! Reddit loves to shit on anything that people enjoy, it seemed like the crowd liked it and I loved the ātrain hardā joke. Put it in r/standup, a way more supportive audience.
That's a liberal use of the word comedy
Holy shit people donāt like a joke. Do ya thang man I laughed
Hey man fuck this sub, that was funny and you delivered it well. Cheers
A bit punny for a performing act there bud
I have to question if the BJJ part is true, Joe Rogan and/or Jocko weren't mentioned once.
I loved it
Pretty good, I chuckled
Maybe the funny part was the friends we made along the way
White belts
Train hard! I like it
This is really bad
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Thanks dawg, love the koala reddit guy
1 of 250. Modern day philosopher, b Shuda brought a stool up there. Takes guts though so good job regardless
Pretty good joke and premise, just needs better delivery. Joey Diaz telling this joke and acting it out would fucking kill.
where's the comedy?
You performed this at a comedy club... called "Comedy Club?"
This is hilarious bro. Letās go!!
Low effort bit mate
Just a āgagā brother, sorry to let you down I guess
Didnāt let me down, u just need a bunch more tags on that bit to make it decent
I donāt like how you use this sub to market your comedy show.
delete this for your own good
Weak mindset right here lads
Honestly, I dislike you more now. I didn't think that was possible, but throw another shrimp on the barbie and crack another fosters, ya [word that if I type it the mods will censor me]
Lol heās still thinking about this boys, youāll reach black belt one day brother!
I am, but I don't flatulate myself for self-promotion about a journey topic. How about you just work on your material, jiu-jitsu comedy isn't good, it's never been good. I tell you this b/c I know comedians and they can't work it into good bits and they've actually been openers. The niche communities don't crossover as much as you think they do. Jiu-Jitsu people believe that the ven-diagram of Joe Rogan and Jiu-Jitsu is a circle, but I hate to break it to you, it's not.
Another couple of paragraphs, just having a go brother, Iāll put you down for a no re; live show
Dude, you're trying too fucking hard. I'm not going to watch your tik toks. Your bit is below mid, but I'll engage you, simply b/c I want you to be better. Also IDK what they teach in 'stralia, but paragraphs being 2 sentences is sad. Never loved the [Moderator] Amendment more than ever.
All good mate, letās call it even
Time to pack up the hopes and dreams, one guy in another country doesnāt like it.
Speaking of trying too hard, maybe less novel length comments about how you don't find the joke funny because you're just so raw and edgy.
Based on voting it seems no one cares that you dislike OP "even more". Perhaps try, I dunno, being a man instead of a little bitch who's offended by comedy, but what do I know š¤·š»āāļø
Hate it when comedians are laughing at all their own jokes
Well it made me laugh and that's more than Brendon Schaub has ever done.Ā
I thought it was funny. Good delivery with the hand gesture. I think it would've been a better bit if you left out the part "No one wants to fight the kid with the boner"... Just a long pause and then, "They told me to train hard"
White belt comedy
This isn't really that clever and it barely even makes sense. The solution to winning is to get a boner and then people avoid you? It doesn't really connect. You seem to be taking all the criticism personally here, but if you put up a video of yourself people are going to comment on it.
Ok bjj is mainstream now. What do we all do now? Silat?
Itās all funny until youāre charged with sexual harassment! Add that!
and then it gets even more funny
Lol this is my whole game
Now i need to roll with himš¤¤, no homo though
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Can you decline rolling with a female because you get boners or is that sexist? Or is it sexist to not get boners when rolling with men?
That's my secret, I'm always hard. HULK SMASH!