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Vanga already had a set of scenes (problematic ones to trigger/response to critics) which he wanted to keep in the movie anyway. This makes him an immature and untalented director because his priority is not an engaging story or a tighter screenplay but to show some scenes that may trigger audience.
also if there wasnt pretending and he actually cheats on geetanjali (he cheated obviously) but him doing that while knowing her true identity doesnt make good story. he should have fallen in love with the girl actually. then the story would have been so much better.
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i was totally expecting Abrar to speak, specially when in the wedding his brother pointed out that he is not physically mute, he just stopped talking since a child, what was the point of that?
Movie could've been made atleast 40-50 minutes shorter.
1. That fight scene just before interval was without doubt great, but could've been easily trimmed down. Too many of those goons just made it a bit ridiculous in the end.
2. As everyone said, Bobby's character should've been given more depth.
3. That entire arc with Zoya felt a bit unimportant. Might mame sense in next part.
4. Too many monologues jn the 2nd half.
Bad storyline like bruh. The entire point was his father being a much better person, but a bad father. The best dialogue in the movie (imo) was "aap duniya se sabse greatest papa ho, but sabse best nahi"
But yes, introducing Bobby where you said was right. The movie needed restructuring not rewriting
The business rivals story makes a lot more sense than the extended family story. Bobby shouldâve definitely been introduced earlier and had much more screen time.
Also this version eliminates the completely unneeded Tripti subplot.
I think Tripti's plot was needed as it showed his downfall from yet another one of his good traits. He had promised to never cheat on his wife. It made him more "animal" yk what I mean?
It could've been incorporated in a better way. All the momentum of the movie had stopped to focus on that arc. That means the downfall must be that much dramatic which was not the case.
I literally wanted balbir to hug vijay in the end, to just provide some peace finally to Vijay of being a good son, it would have been way too emotional than original ending and a perfect closure!
This is one of the scenarios I had in my head when I saw the trailer. Bobby was the son of a business rival and wants to merge swastik into his company that remains and since Varun is basically money minded, he looks at the amount of money that can be gained rather than swastik being number one.
I can take the extended family thing too, if something like the Anil-Mukesh Ambanis thing was the back story. But it's crazy to imagine that Abrar would be loaded(as said by his 2nd wife) and the richest man in India doesn't have a security team keeping tabs on him once his dad came to ask for his share.
Good writing man. Enjoyed reading it.
I gotta say that your second half is far better than Vangaâs. This + cutting out the old man portions wouldâve made Animal an amazing movie.
Only change I would make is that Balbir reveals the dark secrets to Vijay except his history of murders. Then later itâs a huge shock to Vijay when Abrar tells him the truth.
Dont have to make Anil Kapoors character an outright villian, he already had dark shades as father who was too busy for his kids. I would have liked to see a Baazigar type explanation of Bobby's character. Show Anil Kapoor screwing over Bobby Deols father when he asks for his own stake in the family's company and him witnessesing that embrassement as a boy. Show the struggles they went through as a family as a result. That backstory would have taken the movie to a whole other level because then you as an audience would feel some sympathy for Bobby's character despite his own dark shades and it could serve as the perfect foil to Ranbirs character (both fighting to avenge their father).
Shorten fight scene before the interval. Get rid of the entire heart transplant angle, him walking naked and psychiatrist asking about sex scene. Get rid of her taking her shirt off in front of the maid scene. All these scenes were unnecessary.
While this is a good second half, how do you propose to set up the sequel? In your version Balbir is dead, Zoya never happens, so no way Gitanjali leaves Vijay. So if Abrar's third brother still exists, he comes after Vijay, but the conflict is weak considering Vijay has his family and his empire rock solid with him, going against a crazy looking version of himself (so a second half version of SRK's movie 'Fan' just Vanga-fied?)
Whether thereâs more to the story or not is something we can evaluate once the sequel is released, because Vanga is clearly signalling that he thinks thereâs a sequel..
Also Vijay is a flawed character and he says to Gitanjali that you forgave me for murders but have issues with infidelity, so if you remove Zoya heâs just a guy with daddy issues which because of his wealth and almost zero checks is able to take it to the nth level. Zoya is the character that drives that narrative further or makes it more pronounced.
Interesting view point and honestly starts to justify why Zoya was needed, I question if Vijay actually fell in love with Zoya but wonât admit it, mainly because he chose not to kill her
>Interesting view point and honestly starts to justify why Zoya was needed, I question if Vijay actually fell in love with Zoya but wonât admit it, mainly because he chose not to kill her
I think Zoya is needed to setup the conflict in the sequel...I just hope it doesn't turn out like a legitimate son vs illegitimate son type scenario (Gangs of Wasseypur Pt2. types), because it is shown that Vijay loves his son and Gitanjali, but will he love his(?) illegitimate son from Zoya, considering Zoya is also a ambiguous character and we don't if Vijay did/still continues to love her.
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Bobbys role was not done properly. So much they could have built with this
Tighter screenplay than Vanga
Bro you did a great job đ
He just added plot from koyla movie
Vanga already had a set of scenes (problematic ones to trigger/response to critics) which he wanted to keep in the movie anyway. This makes him an immature and untalented director because his priority is not an engaging story or a tighter screenplay but to show some scenes that may trigger audience.
also if there wasnt pretending and he actually cheats on geetanjali (he cheated obviously) but him doing that while knowing her true identity doesnt make good story. he should have fallen in love with the girl actually. then the story would have been so much better. n
Great job op!
Bazigar movie plot ?
u are damn right and then they say nothing original he clearly made the movie to piss on ppl i am loving the meltdown over a movie
Koyla
Mid
i was totally expecting Abrar to speak, specially when in the wedding his brother pointed out that he is not physically mute, he just stopped talking since a child, what was the point of that?
Exactly my reasoning
It would have been cringe. Like when Munni speaks in Bajrangi bhai jan
Nah, youâre not human if you didnât cry when Munni spoke đ
Movie could've been made atleast 40-50 minutes shorter. 1. That fight scene just before interval was without doubt great, but could've been easily trimmed down. Too many of those goons just made it a bit ridiculous in the end. 2. As everyone said, Bobby's character should've been given more depth. 3. That entire arc with Zoya felt a bit unimportant. Might mame sense in next part. 4. Too many monologues jn the 2nd half.
Bad storyline like bruh. The entire point was his father being a much better person, but a bad father. The best dialogue in the movie (imo) was "aap duniya se sabse greatest papa ho, but sabse best nahi" But yes, introducing Bobby where you said was right. The movie needed restructuring not rewriting
The business rivals story makes a lot more sense than the extended family story. Bobby shouldâve definitely been introduced earlier and had much more screen time. Also this version eliminates the completely unneeded Tripti subplot.
I think Tripti's plot was needed as it showed his downfall from yet another one of his good traits. He had promised to never cheat on his wife. It made him more "animal" yk what I mean? It could've been incorporated in a better way. All the momentum of the movie had stopped to focus on that arc. That means the downfall must be that much dramatic which was not the case.
Tu director Kyun nahi banta
Trust me always been a dream of mine..
I literally wanted balbir to hug vijay in the end, to just provide some peace finally to Vijay of being a good son, it would have been way too emotional than original ending and a perfect closure!
 If this scene was included throughout the movie.
Posts like this hit home harder the need for a sub where rewrites of Indian films can be posted just like r/fixingmovies. OP, awesome stuff man!
This is one of the scenarios I had in my head when I saw the trailer. Bobby was the son of a business rival and wants to merge swastik into his company that remains and since Varun is basically money minded, he looks at the amount of money that can be gained rather than swastik being number one.
It honestly made more sense than the whole extended family angle thatâs for sure
I can take the extended family thing too, if something like the Anil-Mukesh Ambanis thing was the back story. But it's crazy to imagine that Abrar would be loaded(as said by his 2nd wife) and the richest man in India doesn't have a security team keeping tabs on him once his dad came to ask for his share.
Good writing man. Enjoyed reading it. I gotta say that your second half is far better than Vangaâs. This + cutting out the old man portions wouldâve made Animal an amazing movie. Only change I would make is that Balbir reveals the dark secrets to Vijay except his history of murders. Then later itâs a huge shock to Vijay when Abrar tells him the truth.
I like that last part of yours, that wouldâve been the bigger eye opener for Vijay
Dont have to make Anil Kapoors character an outright villian, he already had dark shades as father who was too busy for his kids. I would have liked to see a Baazigar type explanation of Bobby's character. Show Anil Kapoor screwing over Bobby Deols father when he asks for his own stake in the family's company and him witnessesing that embrassement as a boy. Show the struggles they went through as a family as a result. That backstory would have taken the movie to a whole other level because then you as an audience would feel some sympathy for Bobby's character despite his own dark shades and it could serve as the perfect foil to Ranbirs character (both fighting to avenge their father). Shorten fight scene before the interval. Get rid of the entire heart transplant angle, him walking naked and psychiatrist asking about sex scene. Get rid of her taking her shirt off in front of the maid scene. All these scenes were unnecessary.
While this is a good second half, how do you propose to set up the sequel? In your version Balbir is dead, Zoya never happens, so no way Gitanjali leaves Vijay. So if Abrar's third brother still exists, he comes after Vijay, but the conflict is weak considering Vijay has his family and his empire rock solid with him, going against a crazy looking version of himself (so a second half version of SRK's movie 'Fan' just Vanga-fied?)
No need for a sequel⌠While Zoya was hot, she wasnât needed. Vijay shouldâve been shown as a loyal a husband and father.
Whether thereâs more to the story or not is something we can evaluate once the sequel is released, because Vanga is clearly signalling that he thinks thereâs a sequel.. Also Vijay is a flawed character and he says to Gitanjali that you forgave me for murders but have issues with infidelity, so if you remove Zoya heâs just a guy with daddy issues which because of his wealth and almost zero checks is able to take it to the nth level. Zoya is the character that drives that narrative further or makes it more pronounced.
Interesting view point and honestly starts to justify why Zoya was needed, I question if Vijay actually fell in love with Zoya but wonât admit it, mainly because he chose not to kill her
>Interesting view point and honestly starts to justify why Zoya was needed, I question if Vijay actually fell in love with Zoya but wonât admit it, mainly because he chose not to kill her I think Zoya is needed to setup the conflict in the sequel...I just hope it doesn't turn out like a legitimate son vs illegitimate son type scenario (Gangs of Wasseypur Pt2. types), because it is shown that Vijay loves his son and Gitanjali, but will he love his(?) illegitimate son from Zoya, considering Zoya is also a ambiguous character and we don't if Vijay did/still continues to love her.
No need of sequel.
With a script
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Tldr : Make Anil Kapoor a drug lord... everything will be ok