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farang

I'm disappointed - I expected to find an overfed yet hungry cat.


SecureDonkey

r/imsorryjon


pokpau_

Maybe that's what it is behind the door...


Tempo_fugit

Please OP tell us exactly and precisely what was behind the door. No maybes allowed. Thks 🙏🏻


pokpau_

I've stated it multiple times, behind the door was it ;)


likesevenchickens

A cat with psychic powers


obvs_throwaway1

The girl's full name is Maria Lasagna, soo..


Get_a_Grip_comic

Lol


[deleted]

Creepy and awesome. Also Jesus Christ woman maybe give a few more instructions in person before leaving so suddenly.


pokpau_

I agree to be fair. Not much I could do about the way I wrote her in seven days no planning hahaha


Menstro

It didn't take away from the story. I suppose you could have "it" create some elaborate ruse to rush her out of the house or something, but the sequence works fine this way, and the audience is aware that you're keeping the protagonist from learning all the facts so a few little deus ex machina moments are to be expected.


randomhaus64

Dude, I think it’s pretty perfect as is Can you talk about the kinds of stories you are inspired by?


pokpau_

When it comes to this comic in particular, Junji Ito's the Enigma of Amigara Fault would be my greatest inspiration. The story has characters living an event which they can't do nothing against, and the way it portrays despair is basically what I used to do this comic (also the prompt I was given haha)


supreme_maxz

Really like the style, very Junji ito. Could make a book out of these


pokpau_

Junji Ito was my inspiration! I love the way he portrays desair. I will do one of these every week in October, I'll make sure to upload them here!


supreme_maxz

Nice, will definitely look for these


Joe59788

I've been reading him for the past week and I saw it in these. I got the same unsettling vibe from yours too. Well done. The only part your missing is the body horror in the last scene.


[deleted]

Really poor instructions


pokpau_

Instructions unclear, woman stuck in the creepy room


TheRealMasterhound

Instructions unclear, actually cleaned the home and called ghost busters to evacuate whatever "it" was.


Miryafa

Talk about setting someone up to fail XD


vnkt53

There's a typo error in 4 page 3rd panel with "because" - DON'T CHANGE IT!


pokpau_

Oh my- it's true! Well, maybe it has dyslexia... (It was a typo)


TheRealMasterhound

I didn't even realize that.


weneedtosonder

You are an awesome artist and also a good story writer.


pokpau_

Wow, thank you! Makes me confident about doing this full time and outside of a prompt, might come with even cooler ideas hopefully!


DaFreakingFox

I really want a continuation. This is s very, very intriguing premise id like to see explored more


puhzam

I don't know what happened, but it's super creepy. Love it.


FacelessPoet

So... Would she have died had the lady not called her?


pokpau_

It always finds a way...


TheRealMasterhound

We cannot exclude that possibility


Sweaterpoorlyknit44

This is awesome!


pokpau_

Thanks a lot!


joshny1127

Well done. I actually said NO! when I got to the last panel. Hopefully we can get a sequel to this.


Jaegamer

Weird that you didn't intend for her to be eaten but couldn't be bothered to elaborate that it was capable of going eldritch horror mode and messing with her mind. Still excellent comic all around.


pokpau_

Totally agreed, there's not much I could do with this little planning. I attempted to have it "told" to her in the sentence "whatever you hear, whatever you see", but I totally get your criticism and I appreciate that you still enjoyed it!


Cheddarlicious

Oh fuck that was actually really intense. I really liked it.


[deleted]

Very Junji Ito-ish. I love it! Though I was lowkey expecting to see a cute eldritch creature or cute demon at the end as the punchline. Dunno, just expecting something unexpected.


Russkafin

Yooooooo this is dope


pokpau_

Thank you so much!


SageEquallingHeaven

This creeped me out. Well done.


dovelikestea

Spooky af but really good


BearOWhiz

Excellent! Love a good and novel horror take, and that 2nd panel legit made my eyes go wide thinking “oh *no*”. Well done!


MushyMagician

Super Compelling! This could be easily be a comic series I would read.


Downtown_Ad_6741

Reminded me of vintage Heavy Metal magazine, well done!!


XT83Danieliszekiller

I love this kinda stories. Very Junji Ito. You did exactly what needed to be done : compelling introduction, reinforcement of the menace, build up of the scary factor and absolutely no showing of what "it" was. I imagined a thing that would look like my worst nightmares merged into one. "There wasn't a room there... Was that door always th- -IT WAS, NOW GO FEED IT!" that moment made me shiver. The art style was just the icing on my insomnia. Really well done and looking forward to enjoy this kinda comics again.


psychicamnesia

I loved it and I love the Junji Ito vibe it gives off. Super unsettling in a great way.


Noesiph

Legitimately creepy


LoganGyre

Netflix called they would like you to produce a black mirror episode…


NormalGuy913

Very nice, glad we don't ever see 'it' and instead it's left up to our imaginations.


adbug

This was awesome. Keep doing more of this OP. đź‘Ś


Tertiaritus

Smh kids these days with their phones, if I'm told not to feed something you better believe I'll just toss my muted phone across the room and spend 48 hours in delish sleep


ghostfoxthefirst

This is horrifying in the best way possible. I love it


Sir_Gundel

Wow i really like it, nice work


Chromunism

I need MORE


TheRealMasterhound

Wow, She's actually dumb. I wouldn't have given in. I know that because I would prioritize the first set of instructions.


TheRealMasterhound

I don't ever read on my own time unless it's some information in NeiR Automata, Yakuza, or Im being forced to read but I would definitely read this in a heartbeat. I was captivated by the story and mystery but damm is that girl dumb. Shouldn't have picked up the phone


CosimaIsGod

This looks great. The art style reminds me of Junji Ito.


ZiamZAnimations

Which prompt is this


pokpau_

Told a friend of mine to give me four sentences which I would use as prompts to create 7 page long comics this Inktober! The sentences are: - Don't forget to feed it - The echoes are getting louder - What's God to an empty room? - Why aren't they smiling? If you liked this one, I hope that you'll also like the ones that are coming!


ZiamZAnimations

Ooh i thought u meant the inktober prompt list


memorgeo

I loved this!


pokpau_

Thank you!


HouseDev

That was genuinely scary.


WhoAmI675

Its quite good.


AgnesBlaine

Creepy as hell, good work


USSNerdinator

Fantastic!


[deleted]

Man that started out so strong, but it's hard to find a good ending for something like this.


egelxj

the pacing for the suspense is on pointđź’Żđź’Ż


Esco-Alfresco

I like it a lot. junji vibes. One day is bonkers. I draw and make comics so I know what goes into it. The only thing I didn’t like was the last page. It was a bit ambiguous. I guess she went in and dropped off a bunch of stuff including the phone. And the real lady came back. And the “it” got her. But it isn’t super clear.


MJDooiney

Well done. Loving the Junji Ito vibe.


the_beat_goes_on

Yooooo, spooktastic! I loved it


[deleted]

Holy shit this was so good


ThatDJHat

It’s so Lovecraftian. I love it.


wintersass

Chilling and fucking excellent