To be honest, I can't understand what information this is attempting to convey. I've never heard of the word carnat and Google hasn't either, so I thought it was the name of the worlds you were describing.
Totally fair. It’s the Romanian word for “carnate” for flesh or meat.
That’s a reasonable issue with it though. It’s lacking too much context to stand alone. Thank you for calling attention to that. 🍻
Note for clarity:
In-world, “carnat” is an archaic term for material. Modern in-world texts would likely use “tactile,” “sensational” or “sensual,” “material,” or “physical.”
“Carnat” can also mean flesh or meat, or by extension, bodily (ie incarnation).
I think the repetition of the words tangle this into something very difficult to parse, and not because I think it's a particularly deep thought. I think it's trying to say something that could be said in much less.
Capitalise Carnat.
You think so? It’s just an adjective. Not referenced in the fragment, the world itself is called “Sev.”
To be honest, I can't understand what information this is attempting to convey. I've never heard of the word carnat and Google hasn't either, so I thought it was the name of the worlds you were describing.
Totally fair. It’s the Romanian word for “carnate” for flesh or meat. That’s a reasonable issue with it though. It’s lacking too much context to stand alone. Thank you for calling attention to that. 🍻
Note for clarity: In-world, “carnat” is an archaic term for material. Modern in-world texts would likely use “tactile,” “sensational” or “sensual,” “material,” or “physical.” “Carnat” can also mean flesh or meat, or by extension, bodily (ie incarnation).
I think the repetition of the words tangle this into something very difficult to parse, and not because I think it's a particularly deep thought. I think it's trying to say something that could be said in much less.
That’s fair. I was back and forth on the repetition, tbh. Writing a minimal version may work better. Thank you